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Portrait of Doc-man
Wow... this "short" is amazing! Not a wasted shot, epic writing, I get it: It's a template for writing a modern (action) screenplay. It hits all the marks; Protagonist, Antagonist, solid beats, low point, climax ... I actually cared more about the characters in this short than any film in recent memory. As a hardworking serious screenwriter let me say 'thank you'. This film has really open my eyes.
Portrait of orange4cat
I think the word that thedenver was looking for was 'climactic'. But regardless, I think this is a great film. I'd love to see it adapted to a feature and with pointed dialogue. If you're looking for a producer....
Portrait of thedenver
i really like the idea but i think the climax could have been more climaxie. i mean he didnt do much to end the "battle". but i love the sets, actors, VO's and the main plot. 4 out of 5 my friend.
 
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